Refutation Essay.

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by Hayley Tran

Submission date: 17-Apr-2019 12:46PM (UT C-0700)

Submission ID: 1114472474
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 Try to say this in
a more direct
way.

Awk.

Int roduce Evidence

 Take the time to unpack this piece of evidence. What does it
mean?

You need a better transition here.

1
 This is a good
claim, but you
need to make
this the focus of
its own
paragraph.
Explain how this
is ad hominem
and why this
matters

New Paragraph

good transition here

New Paragraph

good
Good
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

85
Hayley,

T his is, f or the most part, a thoughtf ul ref utation. I

like that you took the time to pinpoint some of the
logical f allacies that the counters employ. T hat said,

/100
there are several moments when you need to
expand on those ideas. Don't be af raid to separate
them into their own paragraphs. Furthermore, there
are several moments when you needed to clarif y
your meaning with more direct language. I look
f orward to your f inal paper.

PAGE 1

Text Comment. T ry to say this in a more direct way.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Conf used You have used to in this sentence. You may need to use two instead.

QM Introduce Evidence
T ake some time to introduce this quote. By building the author's ethos, you also build your own.

PAGE 2

Text Comment. T ake the time to unpack this piece of evidence. What does it mean?

Text Comment. You need a better transition here.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. Depending upon what you wish to
emphasize in the sentence, you may want to revise it using the active voice.
 Conf used You have used lead in this sentence. You may need to use led instead.

Comment 1 | Unit y

I am not sure how this is relevant to the aboce.

PAGE 3

Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Possessive T his word may be a plural noun and may not need an apostrophe.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

Text Comment. T his is a good claim, but you need to make this the f ocus of its own
paragraph. Explain how this is ad hominem and why this matters

QM New Paragraph
Start a New Paragraph Here

Text Comment. good transition here

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

PAGE 4

QM New Paragraph
Start a New Paragraph Here

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article a.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Text Comment. good

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

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 Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

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Text Comment. Good

RUBRIC: WRITING ASSIGNMENT RUBRIC

UNIT Y Scale 5

SCALE 6 presents a cogent, thesis-driven analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 5 presents a thoughtf ul, thesis-centered analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 4 presents an appropriate, thesis-based analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 3 presents an inconsistent or illogical thesis-related analysis of or response to the text

which ref lects an incomplete understanding of the text or topic

SCALE 2 presents a simplistic, inappropriate, or incoherent thesis-tangential analysis of or

response to the text, one that may suggest some signif icant misunderstanding of the
text or the topic;

SCALE 1 presents an inadequate, thesis-irrelevant analysis of or response to the text,

ignoring the topic’s demands, unacceptable

DEV/SUP Scale 5

SCALE 6 elaborates that response with well-chosen examples and persuasive reasoning,
excellent

SCALE 5 elaborates that response with appropriate examples and logical reasoning

SCALE 4 elaborates that response with acceptable examples and sensible reasoning

SCALE 3 lacks elaboration with appropriate examples , lacking

SCALE 2 lacks elaboration with appropriate examples or elaborates with inappropriate

examples

SCALE 1 lacks any appropriate pattern of development; may be inappropriately brief ,

unacceptable

ORGANIZ AT ION Scale 4

SCALE 6 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to demonstrate the relatedness of ideas and enhances the
power of the argument

SCALE 5 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to convey the argument

SCALE 4 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to illustrate the argument, f its

SCALE 3 deviates f rom an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, so that
organizational structures may detract f rom the argument
SCALE 2 lacks an organizational pattern which f acilitates reader understanding, lacking

SCALE 1 lacks any appropriate organizational pattern, unacceptable

ST YLE Scale 5

SCALE 6 displays a sophisticated style that ref lects aptly chosen words and rhetorically
ef f ective sentence variety

SCALE 5 displays a readable style that ref lects well-chosen words and ef f ective sentences

SCALE 4 displays a style that ref lects appropriate words and sentence variety

SCALE 3 displays a style that ref lects imprecise word choice and little sentence variety

SCALE 2 displays a style that ref lects at least one of the f ollowing: simplistic or inaccurate
word choice; monotonous or f ragmented sentence structure, inappropriate

SCALE 1 displays a style which creates a disconnect between sound and sense, one in which
language word choice and syntax obscure meaning, unacceptable

SWE CONV Scale 5

SCALE 6 exhibits mastery of the conventions of Standard Written English, masterf ul

SCALE 5 demonstrates competence in the conventions of Standard Written English,

competent

SCALE 4 observes conventions of Standard Written English, acceptable

SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
occasional major errors in grammar and usage or f requent minor errors

SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
many repeated errors in grammar and usage

SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English., displaying a
pervasive pattern of errors in word choice, sentence structure, grammar and usage,
unacceptable

FORMAT Scale 6

SCALE 6 exhibits mastery of the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat. masterf ul

SCALE 5 demonstrates competence in the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.

competent

SCALE 4 observes conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat. acceptable

SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of manuscript citation manuscript citation and
f ormat.
SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.

SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.
unacceptable