Understanding IELTS: Writing
STEP 3.9 – Writing a strong conclusion
This is the actual conclusion from the essay shared in this step. Remember, it is only an
example of how this particular candidate wrote their conclusion, it is not the only way to
write a conclusion for this essay. It could be improved, for example, by including a brief
summary of some of the reasons given as to why English and local languages are both
important. It does, however, finish off the essay cleanly and clearly state the writer’s fnal
position. Think about any other ways you might change or improve it.
I think it is important for everyone to learn English but I feel it is unnecessary to frame
learning English and keeping local languages alive as conflicting possibilities. Each goal
supports the other. We should focus on how best to develop both English and local
languages in particular local contexts.
© British Council 2020
Model Answer: Task 2
Students spend a great deal of time and money on tertiary study; therefore,
vocational subjects would be a better investment in terms of immediate job
opportunities. However, not everyone has an aptitude for science, engineering or
medicine, and there is a need for graduates with expertise gained from arts
courses.
In subjects such as philosophy, students learn a valuable set of skills. They become
active thinkers who learn how to solve problems, rather than passive learners who
memorise facts and other people’s ideas. Philosophy students become proficient at
critical and moral thinking, argumentation and debate. The ability to examine
and analyse topical issues or challenge the status quo is very important. After all,
someone needs to question the results or indeed the usefulness of scientific
research, the politician’s assertions, and historical events and assumptions in
general. What is more, scandals in business and government emphasise the
need for ethics in the corporate and public domain.
The sciences and business are clearly very important for our community, and those
who have talent should, of course, pursue a university degree and a career in those
fields. If, however, they also have training in logic and analytical thinking or a
broad general knowledge from studying arts subjects, they are more likely to be
able to solve problems, create initiatives, identify bias and avoid major pitfalls as
they progress through their careers.
In short, I wholeheartedly disagree with the statement that arts subjects should
not be taught. I suggest that every student should have instruction in philosophy,
history or other arts subjects, even if they elect to major in the sciences, because
learning critical thinking skills, and developing a wide background knowledge, will
benefit them enormously in later life. In addition to this general training, we need
specialist graduates in arts subjects to make their contribution to a well-rounded
society.
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