WRITING REVISION

SAMPLE 1
(Many students are considering their choices after high schools. Whether students gGetting a job right after
high school or studying at university for the future has become the controversial issue/ has become of great
controversy). Recently i have heard two conflicting opinions that studying at university  or college is the best
route to successful career, while other people say that it is better to get a job straight after school. In this
essay , I am going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my opinion on the matter.
when discuss about 2 views, both have compelling reasons to prove which option is also correct. With first
opinion "studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career", Firstly, it is believed that
universities and colleges can be regarded as a shortcut to get achievement in careers. There are many people
who choose it for the reason. Nowadays our society is developing dynamically and academic qualification are
required in many professions. Meanwhile, the college and universities meet that demand of the market.
Currently, universities are training many prestigious and quality professions, Ffor example teachers, doctors,
lawyers can not be able to work without... those are al hot professions that do not have qualifications from
pretigious universitiesthat are not allowed to operate. (prove ability + quality of training)
On the other hand, other peoplelarge number said that is better to get a job straight after school. They are think
that going to work have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen
profession. There are people who feel that studying is not right for them and find it annoying. Because they
think that learning at university with all of these theoretical lecture are unattractive and not conducive to going
work after graduation while work at company always requires experience. Further more, it help financially
independent to support themselves and their family.
In my opinion study at university or college is the best for successful career. Because learning at university
will training from specialized skills to skill related to work. University is an environment that help students
prepare well for future job. For example, learning at university will learn many different subjects in many area
of life. There fore we will have more knowledge about life, study, work... that getting a job straight after
school can not to provide usdo.
ToWith me university and college is not only path to success, but it is shortest. In conclusion, Because of that
I think we should learn at university than  get a job straight after school.
SAMPLE 2

Nowadays there are many job opportunities, to find a good job and match your ability is very important. Some
people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others
believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.

Firstly, some people claim that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful
career .Increase your chances of getting a job. There are many people who think that their work does not need
to use the knowledge learned at the university, but the truth is that to get that job, the essential element is a
university degree in hand. Discover many of your own possibilities. Studying in college can help you realize
that you are not suitable for your first choice of major or joining university clubs to help you discover your
ability in another field of expertise. This will make an important contribution to the direction of your future
work. Academic qualifications are required in many professions teacher, doctor, lawyer the job market is
becoming increasingly competitive applicants with good certificates stand better chance of getting a job, have
the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. Finally, College
helps us to have a good job, stable, work in a good environment. High income, able to be financially
independent and support the family.

Secondly, others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. have the chance to gain real
experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. Financial independence early and
independent of family. Experience new jobs. financially independent to support themselves and their family.
In my opinion, going to college is an easy way to achieve success, we learn a lot of useful knowledge to serve
in the future. Working in a professional environment with many different professions, when we go to college,
we will have a high position in society, making it easier to make money. So every young person needs to think
about choosing a college education, because that is the easy way to success.

SAMPLE 3

     Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while
others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. In my opinion, studying at university or college
is the best route to a successful career. Because of the following reasons. First, academic qualifications are
required in many professions ( teacher, doctor, lawyer ). Currently, companies are recruiting highly qualified
staff to serve the working process to achieve high productivity. Secondly, the job market is becoming
increasingly competitive so applicants with good certificates stand better chance of getting a job. Thirdly, have
the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. The last,
financially independent to support themselves and their family. Immediately after graduating from school, I
did not have much working experience and knowledge to serve the job. So I think studying at university or
college is the best route to a  successful career.
SAMPLE 4
Fact paraphrased?Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful
career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
In other words, The question was whether to get a job after entering college or to get a job right after
graduating from high school.
In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my own opinion on
the matter. 
On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of  graduated university due to the
following reasons. . 
There are many reasons for this.
Firstlyor the first time, academic qualifications are required in many professions. And the qualification is
likely to be to graduate from college.
Second, there are more possibilities when you go to college. Learning in high school is limited, while learning
in college provides a deeper understanding, more comprehensive perspectives of every matter is wide and
deep.
Third, it is advantageous to get a job. Learning and experience in college give employment an advantage.
It is essential to graduate from college for a job like a doctor or a teacher. Professional learning in college
makes you get a good job. And being able to learn a deep and wide education in college makes you closer to a
professor or other jobs you want.
On the other hand, there is an opinion that you should get a job right away without going to college.
There are many advantages to this opinion as well.
First, you can have a chance to learn practical skills related to your chosen job.
Second, you can support yourself and your family by becoming economically independent.
These benefits can be an important asset to your future life. It is highly likely that mastering the skills of one's
chosen profession and improving one's skills in practical areas will help one adapt to real-life workplace easier
later.live a life.
 
 In my opinion, both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, I tend to believe that studying
something professional in college can be more helpful in life.