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Be Valuable
Be Persuasive
Be Organised
Be Clear
Be Brief
Characteristics of professional writing (clarity, conciseness, structure).
Differences between academic and business writing.
Academic and business writing serve distinct purposes and audiences, leading to notable
differences in style, structure, and tone.
1.Purpose:
2. Audience
Academic Writing: Primarily targets scholars, researchers, and students familiar with the
subject matter.
Academic Writing: Utilizes a formal tone, often employing third-person perspective and
passive voice. It emphasizes objectivity and thoroughness.
Example: "The study was conducted to assess the effects of the intervention."
Business Writing: Adopts a more direct and concise style, frequently using active voice and
first or second person as appropriate. Clarity and brevity are prioritized to ensure quick
comprehension.
Example: "We conducted the study to assess the effects of the intervention."
Academic Writing: Follows a structured format, often including sections like abstract,
introduction, literature review, methodology, results, and conclusion.
Business Writing: Varies in structure depending on the document type (e.g., memos, reports,
emails) and is designed for easy navigation, often employing headings, bullet points, and
visuals.
5. Language Use
Example: "The results show that the variability of errors changes across the data
range."
Academic Writing: Requires rigorous citation of sources following specific academic styles
(e.g., APA, MLA) to support arguments and provide evidence.
Business Writing: While it may reference data or sources, formal citations are less common;
the focus is on practical information and actionable insights.
Subject: Meeting
Hey,
I hope you're good. I wanted to touch base about the thing we talked about last week. Can we
meet sometime to discuss it? Let me know when you're free.
Thanks,
[Your Name]
Issues:
Vague Subject Line: "Meeting" doesn't provide specific information about the
email's purpose.
Informal Greeting: Starting with "Hey" is too casual for professional
correspondence.
Lack of Specificity: Phrases like "the thing we talked about" and "sometime" are
ambiguous.
No Clear Call to Action: Doesn't specify what the recipient should do next.
The sales performance of our company in the third quarter of 2023 was not
good. We did not meet our sales targets and we lost some customers. The
marketing team tried their best, but the results were disappointing. We
need to improve our strategies to do better in the future.
Issues:
Lack of Data: No specific numbers or statistics are provided to illustrate
performance.
Vague Language: Terms like "not good" and "some customers" are
imprecise.
No Analysis: Fails to explore reasons behind poor performance or
suggest actionable steps.
Unstructured: Lacks headings, subheadings, or sections to organize
content.
here are improved versions of the previously provided business email and report:
Following our discussion last week regarding Project XYZ, I would like to schedule a
meeting to review our progress and outline the next steps. Could we arrange a time to meet
this week? Please let me know your availability.
Thank you,
[Your Name]
Improvements Made:
Executive Summary:
In Q3 2023, our company achieved sales totaling $2.5 million, falling short of the $3 million
target by 16.7%. This shortfall is primarily due to a 10% decrease in customer retention and a
5% decline in new customer acquisitions. The marketing initiatives implemented during this
period did not yield the anticipated results. To address these challenges, it is recommended to
reassess our marketing strategies, enhance customer engagement programs, and explore new
market segments.
Introduction:
This report examines the sales performance for the third quarter of 2023, identifies key
factors contributing to the shortfall, and proposes actionable strategies for improvement.
Analysis:
Recommendations:
Conclusion:
Addressing the identified issues through the recommended strategies is essential to achieve
our sales targets in the upcoming quarters.
Improvements Made:
These revisions enhance clarity, professionalism, and provide a solid foundation for informed
decision-making.
2. Email Writing Exercise (40 min)
o Students draft a professional email (e.g., requesting a meeting, responding to a
complaint).
o Peer review session: Students provide feedback using a checklist.
I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to sincerely apologize for the
inconvenience you experienced with [specific issue, e.g., "the delayed delivery of your
recent order"]. We understand how frustrating this must have been for you.
Upon investigating the matter, we discovered that [briefly explain the cause of the issue,
e.g., "a logistical error in our warehouse led to the delay"]. We have taken immediate
steps to rectify this, including [specific actions taken, e.g., "implementing a new
tracking system to prevent such errors in the future"].
To address the inconvenience caused, we would like to offer you [compensation, e.g., "a
15% discount on your next purchase"]. Please use the code [DISCOUNT CODE] at
checkout.
We value your feedback and are committed to improving our services. If you have any
further concerns or need assistance, please do not hesitate to contact us directly at
[contact information].
Thank you for bringing this to our attention and for your continued support.
Warm regards,
[Your Name]
[Your Position]
[Company Name]
[Contact Information]
Feedback Checklist:
1. Timely Response:
o Was the complaint addressed promptly?
2. Personalization:
o Is the customer's name used?
o Does the response reference the specific issue raised?
3. Empathy and Apology:
o Does the email express understanding of the customer's frustration?
o Is there a sincere apology for the inconvenience caused?
4. Explanation:
o Is there a clear explanation of what went wrong?
o Does it avoid unnecessary jargon?
5. Resolution and Compensation:
o Is a solution or compensation offered to the customer?
o Are the details of how to avail the compensation clearly stated?
6. Commitment to Improvement:
o Does the email convey steps taken to prevent future occurrences?
7. Contact Information:
o Is there an invitation for further communication?
o Are contact details provided?
8. Professional Tone and Language:
o Is the tone appropriate and professional?
o Is the language clear and free of errors?
9. Brevity and Clarity:
o Is the email concise yet comprehensive?
o Are the key points easy to identify?
10. Positive Closing:
o Does the email end on a positive note, reinforcing the company's
commitment to the customer?
By adhering to this checklist, you can ensure that your response to customer complaints
is effective, professional, and fosters customer satisfaction.
1. Pair Activity
o Review and critique an existing business proposal.
2. Practical Writing Task
Objective: Develop a concise and persuasive business proposal to enhance your professional
writing skills.
Assignment Details:
1. Scenario: Imagine you are part of a team at a company that specializes in [industry of
your choice]. Your team has identified an opportunity to propose a new project or
initiative that could benefit the company.
2. Task: Write a business proposal (1,000–1,500 words) addressed to the company's
executive team. Your proposal should include the following sections:
o Title Page:
Project Title
Your Name
Date
o Executive Summary:
A brief overview of the proposal's main points.
o Introduction:
Background information on the current situation or problem.
Purpose of the proposal.
o Problem Statement:
A clear description of the issue that needs to be addressed.
o Proposed Solution:
Detailed explanation of your proposed project or initiative.
How it addresses the problem.
o Benefits:
Outline the advantages of implementing your proposal.
Include any data or research to support your claims.
o Implementation Plan:
Step-by-step plan for executing the proposal.
Timeline and key milestones.
o Budget:
Estimated costs associated with the proposal.
Justification for the expenses.
o Conclusion:
Summary of key points.
Call to action or request for approval.
3. Formatting:
o Use a professional tone and language throughout.
o Ensure the document is well-organized with clear headings and subheadings.
o Proofread for grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.
4. Submission:
o Submit your proposal as a PDF document by [due date].
Resources:
For guidance on writing business proposals, refer to Business Writing - UNC Writing
Center.
Review sample proposals and templates to understand structure and content.
Evaluation Criteria:
This assignment aims to simulate a real-world business scenario, allowing you to apply
professional writing techniques and strategic thinking. Approach this task as if you are
genuinely pitching a proposal to your company's leadership team.
Certainly, analyzing real-world business proposals and persuasive letters can provide
valuable insights into effective professional writing. Below are examples of each, along with
discussions on what makes them effective.
Executive Summary:
ABC Marketing Agency proposes a comprehensive digital marketing strategy for XYZ
Corporation aimed at increasing online visibility, driving website traffic, and boosting sales
conversions. Our approach includes SEO optimization, content marketing, social media
management, and targeted advertising campaigns.
Proposed Services:
Budget:
Effectiveness Analysis:
Clarity: The proposal clearly outlines the services offered, ensuring the client
understands what is being provided.
Structure: Organized with headings and bullet points, making it easy to navigate.
Specificity: Provides detailed timelines and deliverables, setting clear expectations.
Professional Tone: Maintains a formal and respectful tone throughout.
I am writing to propose the adoption of flexible working hours within our department. This
initiative aims to enhance employee productivity, job satisfaction, and work-life balance.
Studies have shown that flexible schedules can lead to a 15% increase in productivity and a
20% improvement in employee morale. By allowing employees to adjust their working hours,
we can accommodate individual peak performance times and personal commitments, leading
to a more motivated and efficient team.
I recommend a pilot program where employees can choose their start and end times within a
specified range. We can assess the program's impact over a six-month period and make
adjustments as necessary.
Thank you for considering this proposal. I am available to discuss this further at your
convenience.
Sincerely,
[Your Name]
Effectiveness Analysis:
Clear Purpose: The letter states its intent upfront, making the purpose immediately
known.
Evidence-Based: Cites statistics to support the argument, adding credibility.
Conciseness: Keeps the message brief and to the point, respecting the reader's time.
Call to Action: Ends with a suggestion for further discussion, encouraging
engagement.
These examples illustrate the importance of clarity, structure, specificity, and a professional
tone in business communications. By incorporating these elements, writers can create
compelling proposals and letters that effectively convey their messages and persuade their
audiences.
Task: Write a formal business letter (approximately 500 words) addressed to the appropriate
stakeholder (e.g., supervisor, client, vendor) with the goal of persuading them to take a
specific action. Your letter should include the following elements:
1. Heading:
o Your Name
o Your Position
o Company Name
o Company Address
o City, Postal code
o Email Address
o Phone Number
2. Date:
o [Insert Date]
3. Recipient’s Information:
o Recipient’s Name
o Recipient’s Position
o Company Name
o Company Address
o City, Postal code
4. Salutation:
o Dear [Recipient’s Name],
5. Body:
o Introduction:
Clearly state the purpose of the letter.
Provide context or background information relevant to the issue.
o Main Content:
Present compelling arguments supporting your request or proposal.
Use data, examples, or anecdotes to strengthen your case.
Address potential counterarguments or concerns.
o Conclusion:
Summarize the key points.
Clearly state the desired action you want the recipient to take.
Express appreciation for the recipient’s time and consideration.
6. Closing:
o Sincerely,
o [Your Signature]
o [Your Typed Name]
Formatting Guidelines:
Submission:
Evaluation Criteria:
Clarity and Coherence: The letter is well-organized and the purpose is clearly
stated.
Persuasiveness: Arguments are compelling and supported by evidence.
Professionalism: The letter follows standard business formatting and maintains a
formal tone.
Mechanics: The letter is free from grammatical, spelling, and punctuation errors.
Resources:
This assignment aims to simulate a real-world business scenario, allowing you to practice
crafting persuasive communications that can influence decision-making processes.
Learning Outcomes:
Title Page
XYZ Corporation
Table of Contents
1. Introduction
2. Methodology
3. Findings
4. Discussion
5. Conclusions
6. Recommendations
7. References
8. Appendices
Introduction
The purpose of this report is to assess customer satisfaction with XYZ Corporation's
support services and identify areas for improvement. Maintaining high customer
satisfaction is crucial for customer retention and brand reputation.
Methodology
Data was gathered using an online survey distributed to 500 customers who interacted
with support services in the past quarter. Additionally, support ticket data from the
same period was analyzed to assess resolution times and common issues.
Findings
- Average resolution time increased from 24 hours to 29 hours over six months.
Discussion
The increase in resolution times correlates with decreased customer satisfaction. Issues
with product documentation suggest a need for clearer user guides, which could reduce
support requests.
Conclusions
The increase in resolution times correlates with decreased customer satisfaction. Issues
with product documentation suggest a need for clearer user guides, which could reduce
support requests.
Recommendations
- Provide advanced training for support staff focusing on efficient problem-solving and
customer communication.
- Upgrade the support ticketing system to prioritize urgent issues and track follow-ups.
- Revise product documentation to address common user issues, reducing the need for
support.
References
Appendices
Materials:
en.wikipedia.org
Executive Summary
This report examines the declining customer satisfaction levels at XYZ Corporation over the
past fiscal year. Through comprehensive data analysis and customer feedback, it was
identified that prolonged product delivery times and subpar customer service interactions are
the primary contributors to decreased satisfaction rates. To address these challenges, the
report recommends implementing a streamlined logistics system to expedite deliveries and
initiating a comprehensive training program aimed at enhancing customer service skills
among support staff. These strategic actions are projected to improve customer satisfaction
scores by 25% within the next year, thereby bolstering customer retention and driving
revenue growth.
1. Introduction:
o Briefly state the purpose of the report.
2. Problem Statement:
o Summarize the main issue or challenge addressed in the report.
3. Analysis:
Highlight the key findings from the data or research conducted.
o
4. Recommendations:
o Outline the proposed solutions or actions to address the identified issues.
5. Conclusion:
o Summarize the anticipated outcomes or benefits of implementing the
recommendations.
Learning Outcomes:
Activities:
I hope this message finds you well. Following our recent discussions, I am pleased to present
a proposal aimed at enhancing our customer support services to better meet client needs.
Proposal Overview:
I look forward to discussing this proposal in more detail at your convenience. Please let me
know a suitable time for a meeting.
Best regards,
Jane Doe
XYZ Corporation
I trust this email finds you well. Building upon our recent conversations, I am pleased to
share a proposal designed to enhance our customer support services, ensuring they align with
the diverse needs of our global clientele.
Proposal Overview:
I look forward to discussing this proposal further. Please let me know a suitable time for a
meeting.
Best regards,
Jane Doe
XYZ Corporation
Adaptation Considerations:
Language and Tone: The adapted email maintains a formal and respectful tone,
suitable for international business communication.
Clarity and Simplicity: The message uses clear and straightforward language to
ensure understanding across diverse cultural backgrounds.
Cultural Sensitivity: The email avoids idiomatic expressions and culturally specific
references that may not translate well internationally.
Professionalism: The structure and content reflect professionalism, acknowledging
the importance of clear communication in a global business environment.
By considering these factors, the adapted email aims to communicate effectively with an
Analyzing business communication styles between Moroccan and British cultures reveals
distinct differences shaped by historical, social, and cultural factors. Understanding these
differences is crucial for effective cross-cultural interactions.
1. Communication Style
Morocco:
o Indirect and High-Context: Moroccan communication tends to be indirect,
with messages often conveyed through context, non-verbal cues, and implied
meanings. Direct confrontation is generally avoided to maintain harmony and
prevent loss of face.
guide.culturecrossing.net
2. Business Relationships
Morocco:
o Relationship-Oriented: Building personal relationships is a prerequisite for
successful business dealings. Trust is established through social interactions,
and business discussions often occur after a personal rapport is developed.
commisceo-global.com
o Hierarchical Structure: Moroccan businesses are typically hierarchical, with
decision-making concentrated at the top. Respect for authority and seniority is
paramount.
commisceo-global.com
United Kingdom:
o Task-Oriented: While relationships are important, British business culture
focuses on tasks and objectives. Professionalism and efficiency are prioritized,
and personal relationships, though beneficial, are not mandatory for business
success.
o Egalitarian Approach: British organizations often adopt a more egalitarian
structure, encouraging open dialogue and input from various levels within the
organization.
3. Time Management
Morocco:
o Flexible Time Orientation: Punctuality is approached with flexibility.
Meetings may not start precisely on time, and the focus is on the event's
quality rather than strict adherence to schedules.
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United Kingdom:
o Strict Time Adherence: Punctuality is a sign of professionalism and respect.
Meetings are expected to start and end as scheduled, and time management is
crucial.
Morocco:
o Consensus and Patience: Decisions are made after thorough deliberation and
consensus-building. Negotiations may be prolonged, with an emphasis on
relationship-building and mutual benefit.
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United Kingdom:
o Efficiency and Directness: Decision-making processes are more streamlined,
with a focus on efficiency. Negotiations are conducted with clarity, aiming for
prompt agreements.
Initial Meetings: The British team schedules a meeting for 10:00 AM and arrives
promptly. The Moroccan counterparts arrive at 10:15 AM, engaging in extended
pleasantries before discussing business. The British perceive this as a lack of
professionalism, while the Moroccans view the British as overly rigid.
Communication: During discussions, the British team presents their proposal directly
and expects immediate feedback. The Moroccan team, valuing indirect
communication, provides non-committal responses, intending to discuss internally
before providing a definitive answer. The British interpret this as disinterest, while the
Moroccans see it as a thoughtful consideration.
Decision-Making: The British team seeks a swift decision to proceed, emphasizing
efficiency. The Moroccan team prefers to build a relationship first, involving multiple
stakeholders in the decision-making process, leading to delays. The British feel
frustrated by the slow pace, while the Moroccans feel pressured.
Conclusion:
Materials:
The AIDA model (Attention, Interest, Desire, Action) for persuasive writing.
Components of a proposal (introduction, problem statement, solution, benefits, call to
action).
Checklist for online business writing
Creating compelling content for LinkedIn and professional websites is essential for engaging
your audience and achieving your communication goals. Below are best practices for each
platform, illustrated with real-world examples.
Tailor Content: Craft posts that resonate with your target audience's interests and
professional needs.
5. Be Authentic:
o Example: "What are your thoughts on remote work productivity? Share your
experiences below."
7. Utilize Hashtags and SEO:
9. Monitor Performance:
Inverted Pyramid Style: Place the most critical information at the beginning.
Enhance Readability: Break content into manageable sections with headings and
bullet points.
SEO Best Practices: Incorporate relevant keywords naturally and ensure meta
tags are descriptive.
Responsive Design: Optimize your website for various devices to reach a broader
audience.
oExample: An e-commerce site ensures its product pages are easily navigable
on smartphones and tablets.
8. Maintain Consistent Branding:
Unified Appearance: Ensure that fonts, colors, and messaging align with your
brand identity.
oExample: A consulting firm's website uses a consistent color scheme and tone
that reflects its professionalism.
9. Provide Clear Calls to Action (CTAs):
Guide User Behavior: Encourage users to take specific actions, such as signing
up for a newsletter or contacting for services.
o Example: A fitness trainer's website includes CTAs like "Book Your Free
Consultation Today" to prompt potential clients.
10. Regularly Update Content:
Keep Information Current: Regular updates improve SEO and demonstrate that
your site is active.
o Example: A tech news site publishes daily articles to keep readers informed
about the latest developments.
As leaders, fostering a productive and positive work environment is paramount. Here are five
strategies to enhance team performance:
What approaches have you found effective in leadership? Share your experiences below!
1. Understand Your Audience: The post addresses leaders and managers seeking to
improve team dynamics.
2. Craft Attention-Grabbing Headlines: The title clearly states the topic and offers
actionable insights.
3. Add Value: Provides practical strategies that readers can implement.
4. Use Visuals Wisely: Including a relevant image or infographic can enhance
engagement.
5. Be Authentic: Shares genuine advice based on common leadership principles.
6. Encourage Discussion: Ends with a question prompting readers to share their
experiences.
7. Utilize Hashtags and SEO: Relevant hashtags increase visibility to a broader
audience.
8. Maintain Consistency: Regularly posting similar content establishes authority in
leadership topics.
9. Monitor Performance: Engagement metrics can inform future content strategies.
Our Services:
Our team of experienced professionals is dedicated to helping your business thrive in today's
competitive landscape.
Contact Us:
Ready to take your business to the next level? Reach out to us at [contact information] to
learn more about how we can assist you.
1. Write Clear and Concise Content: The text is straightforward, outlining services
without unnecessary jargon.
2. Prioritize Important Information: Key services are listed prominently to capture
visitor interest.
3. Chunk Content: Bullet points and headings make the information easily digestible.
4. Be Concise: Keeps descriptions brief while conveying essential details.
5. Optimize for Search Engines: Incorporates relevant keywords naturally.
6. Use Visuals and Multimedia: Adding images or videos related to services can
enhance engagement.
7. Ensure Mobile-Friendliness: A responsive design ensures accessibility across
devices.
8. Maintain Consistent Branding: Consistent use of company name and service
descriptions reinforces brand identity.
9. Provide Clear Calls to Action (CTAs): Encourages visitors to contact the company
for further engagement.
10. Regularly Update Content: Keeping information current reflects the company's
active status and reliability.
By following these best practices, you can create compelling LinkedIn posts and website
content that effectively engage your audience and promote your professional objectives.
1. Grammatical Mistakes
Issue: Subject-verb agreement error; "company" is a singular noun and should be paired with
a singular verb.
Tip: Ensure that subjects and verbs agree in number. Singular subjects take singular verbs,
and plural subjects take plural verbs.
2. Ethical Mistakes
Issue: This is misleading and can damage trust when the truth emerges.
Correction: Present all relevant data transparently, providing explanations for any negative
figures.
Tip: Maintain honesty and integrity in all business communications to uphold ethical
standards.
Example: An American manager tells a Chinese client to "sit anywhere" during a meeting.
Issue: In cultures that value hierarchy, such as China, not assigning a specific seat can be
seen as disrespectful.
Tip: Research cultural norms and practices of your audience to avoid misunderstandings.
4. Use of Jargon
Example: "We need to leverage our core competencies to achieve a paradigm shift."
Issue: Overuse of jargon can make the message unclear to those not familiar with the terms.
Correction: "We need to use our main strengths to make a significant change."
Tip: Use clear and straightforward language to ensure your message is accessible to all
readers.
5. Use of Clichés
Issue: Clichés are overused expressions that can make writing seem unoriginal.
Tip: Strive for originality in your writing to keep your audience engaged.
By being mindful of these common pitfalls and implementing the suggested corrections, you
can enhance the clarity, effectiveness, and professionalism of your business communications.
Sources
Effective business communication requires attention to detail, cultural awareness, and clarity.
Below are further examples of common pitfalls in professional writing, along with
explanations and corrections:
1. Grammatical Mistakes
Issue: The singular noun "employee" is incorrectly paired with the plural pronoun "their."
Tip: Ensure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they refer to.
2. Ethical Mistakes
Issue: This misrepresentation can lead to loss of trust and potential legal consequences.
Correction: Provide clients with accurate, realistic projections based on thorough analysis.
Example: An American manager uses sports metaphors like "hit a home run" in a meeting
with international colleagues.
Issue: Such idioms may be unfamiliar or confusing to those from different cultural
backgrounds.
Correction: Use clear, universal language that can be easily understood by all participants.
Tip: Be mindful of cultural differences and avoid colloquialisms that may not translate well.
4. Use of Jargon
Example: "We need to synergize our verticals to optimize the value proposition."
Issue: Overuse of jargon can obscure the message and alienate readers.
5. Use of Clichés
Example: "At the end of the day, we need to think outside the box."
Issue: Clichés can make writing seem unoriginal and may dilute the message.
By being aware of these common issues and implementing the suggested corrections, you can
enhance the effectiveness and professionalism of your business communications.
AVOID CLICHES
Cliches are overused expressions. They become overused because they seem to describe cer
tain situations in a light, colourful, and very truthful way. The problem with using them is
that, once they become overused, they start to sound like a fan running softly in the back
ground, and they lose their effectiveness. They just don’t deliver your message with the same
force as your own original words.
There are hundreds of cliches, but here are some of the most common ones found in
business writing:
add insult to injury
back to the drawing board
ballpark figure
beat a dead horse
behind the eight ball
beside the point
bottom line
business as usual
clear the air
cream of the crop
dialogue
dog-eat-dog
do’s and don’ts
dot the i’s and cross the t’s
eleventh hour
few and far between
first and foremost
get a leg up on
grin and bear it
hand in glove
hands-on
handwriting on the wall
heads will roll
hem and haw
hence
heretofore
hit pay dirt
hit the nail on the head
if worse comes to worst
in a nutshell
interface
knuckle under
last but not least
lesser of the two evils
letter perfect
low man on the totem pole
make ends meet
mark my words
meaningful
meet your needs
more or less
movers and shakers
pack it in
pay the piper
point in time
rat race
roll with the punches
run it up the flagpole
spill the beans
state of the art
take the ball and run with it
too many irons in the fire
well and good
The idea with cliches is that any one of them can be replaced with solid information.
Sometimes, we can’t help ourselves, and we use them because they describe a situation
perfectly or convey a thought in a light, humorous manner. But, we tend to use cliches when
we either don’t know the information we’re referring to or when we’re unsure how to word
something. So, take a chance and be original! It shows you know your stuff—and, at the
very least, you will be heard.
Use correct English; avoid slang. Instead of “It is like tomorrow is a new day,” write
“Tomorrow is a new day.” Don’t say, “I went tomorrow is a new day, and he goes, ‘No,
tomorrow is not a new day.’” Use the verb said instead of went or goes.
SLANG
Slang is defined as nonstandard terms—not vulgarisms—that are used in the conversa
tional style of a given culture. Standard English is the standardized, well-known language
structure. It is important to understand that the recommended conversational writing style
of today does not translate into a free pass to use slang. What it does mean is that, while
most slang terms can be found in the dictionary, they are not suggested terms for business
correspondence—even the most casual kind.
For one thing, slang is vague. It does little more than just give the reader an
overall
picture of a situation, rather than provide the descriptive words needed to clarify
something.
It also demonstrates lack of ability to come up with your own words. The reader
might be
left wondering about your intelligence. It is also unprofessional—there is no other
way to
categorize it. Use standard English, with a warm and conversational tone, and
you can never
go wrong.
Here are a few slang terms to avoid:
axed
bogus
booted
break a leg
bummer 44
canned
don’t blow it
don’t drag it out
get a grip
get the lead out
get with the program
green light
hosed
keep your shirt on
out of whack
thumbs-down
thumbs-up
up to snuff
BIASED WORDS: BE AWARE, BUT SENSIBLE
These days, it seems like there’s very little you can say or write anymore without
getting your
self into some kind of trouble by using the wrong words. A new and increasingly
diverse
workforce inevitably brings change, and with it, an obvious need for some
degree of sen
sitivity to that change. The question then remains: What are the words we need
to look out
for, and how carried away are we going to get with this stuff?
Biased words are words that are considered discriminatory, or degrading, to
particular
groups of people. Three main areas of concern in the workplace are gender,
race, and dis
ability issues. The best rule of thumb is to always be aware of your audience, and
always use
your common sense. Since you cannot possibly control what is going to offend
every per
son you meet, you will do well to simply be aware and use your common sense.
Following
are some tips on how to handle sensitive words.
GENDER ISSUES
This is a pretty easy one: Just use the person’s title; or, use person at the end of
certain terms:
ad man
advertising executive
fireman firefighter
housewife homemaker (or stay-at-home mom or dad)
mailman mail carrier
policeman police officer
salesman salesperson
spokesman spokesperson
TV anchorman
TV anchor
weatherman meteorologist
When referring to a couple, don’t make any assumptions:
No: Mr. Ammerman and Caryn
Yes: Mr. Ammerman and Ms. Fetzer
Use professional, rather than personal, descriptive terms:
No: Robin Benoit, a lovely associate
Yes: Robin Benoit, an experienced associate
RACE ISSUES
The biggest lesson here is to focus on the person, not on the race to which they
happen to
belong. Avoid stereotyping by simply emphasizing the person’s individual,
professional
characteristics and qualifications, not racial characteristics. Race is irrelevant to
a person’s level
of intelligence and to his or her job performance. The only exception to this is
when a per
son is filling out a personal profile in a human resources department. That is
done expressly
to help the Census Bureau with their workforce statistics. So, just completely
omit any and
all racial references. They don’t belong in business, nor do they belong anywhere
else. Race
is, in effect, a non-issue in your business writing.
DISABILITY ISSUES
The same rules apply to disability issues as to race issues. A person’s disability is
a non-issue
where their professional qualifications are concerned. Of course, there are some
obvious
physical and mental limitations where certain people are concerned, but those
are issues
that are between a supervisor and an employee. They have no bearing on what
you should
or should not write in a business letter. Address the person, not their disability.
SUMMARY
The message of this section is clear: In all your writing, be accurate, be original,
be profes
sional, and be sensible. Study the lists of words and terms that take away from
your writ
ing effectiveness. Learn the meanings of words and how to spell them.
Remember that spell
check won’t catch proper words that are used in the wrong context. Also, do not
use words
that are not words. Try to avoid cliches and apply some of your own brilliant
thoughts. And,
of course, use sensitivity and reason when you address someone.
Your job is to be aware of the growing and changing global workforce, and to
apply your
best thoughts to that process. Try to maintain professionalism and
understanding in all that
you write.
The message is simple: Your writing is you. It shows how your mind works. In
fact, many
of your business contacts may only know you through your writing, so be aware
of the
written image portrayed through your business correspondence. One elementary
school
teacher takes this theory a step further, saying that she would rather stand
naked in front
of a room full of parents than have her writing skills exposed. If you approach
your writ
ing with the knowledge that you can—and should—be yourself, then you are on
your way
to success!
YOUR STYLE
Style: It is not what you say, but how you say it. How true. E.B. White (coauthor
of the
acclaimed Elements of Style) asserted that all writers reveal something of their
spirit, their
habits, their biases, and their abilities by the way they use their language. And,
when you
write, you are making not only a first impression, but also a permanent
impression on the
reader. So, make it a good one.
We have established the fact that a conversational tone is the trend in business
writing
today. Our letters come across warmer, livelier, and easier to understand when
we write nat
urally. So, let your personality gracefully flow through your words and watch your
writing
style unfold before you.
It is first important to distinguish between a business-appropriate style and one
that may
be you but is not good business form. An executive for a technical company says
this about
one of his employees:
He is a brilliant analyst, but he is from another country and only speaks English
sparingly. Unfortunately, the first words he has learned are a few basics and a
few expletives. So, whenever he writes, he doesn’t necessarily realize how he’s
com
ing across to his audience. He sees his writing as his personal style, but what
he’s
really laying the groundwork for is either a lawsuit or a client bailout. It can be
funny internally, but when you imagine yourself sitting at the other end of the
line, reading this thing written by this person whose personality you are not famil
iar with, it does not conjure up the best mental picture.
The lesson here is to be careful with your choice of style. Take the basics of your
per
sonality and apply them in a professional way at all times.