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5.03 Graded Assignment Recognizing Fluency (3)

The document presents three samples of writing about the passion for dance, each expressing different levels of fluency and emotional engagement. Sample 1 and Sample 3 are rated higher for their strong rhythm, varied sentence structures, and effective use of punctuation, while Sample 2 is rated lower due to its repetitive sentence styles and lack of emotional depth. The analysis includes a breakdown of specific fluency elements such as rhythm, cadence, and diction for each sample.

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5.03 Graded Assignment Recognizing Fluency (3)

The document presents three samples of writing about the passion for dance, each expressing different levels of fluency and emotional engagement. Sample 1 and Sample 3 are rated higher for their strong rhythm, varied sentence structures, and effective use of punctuation, while Sample 2 is rated lower due to its repetitive sentence styles and lack of emotional depth. The analysis includes a breakdown of specific fluency elements such as rhythm, cadence, and diction for each sample.

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5.

03 Graded Assignment: Recognizing Fluency


Sample 1
My Passion
I am passionate about my dancing. I have studied ballet since I was six years old, and I continue to love
this pursuit. Although it is grueling work to prepare the body and the mind for a performance, I
experience a delicious euphoria when I am on stage. When exhausted after a day's practice, I often
wonder whether the end result is worth the physical discipline, self-denial and mental focus. Then, I
imagine myself on stage again, at the height of fitness and alertness, ready for that opening curtain. This
is when I know that, yes, it is all worth it!

Sample 2
My Passion
I love to dance. I love the stage and the lights. I love the audience and the excitement of the
performance. I don't always love the preparation it takes to get me onto that stage. The physical work is
grueling. The mental discipline is hard. I can't always eat everything other teens eat. I sometimes wonder
if it's all worth it. When I'm ready to perform, though, I guess it is.

Sample 3
My Passion
Dance is my life. It is my heart and soul. I am passionate about dance. On stage, I feel groundless, as if I
have no limits, no earthly weight. The spirit of freedom which sinks into my every cell sets my body free.
When I dance, everything is possible! When I dance, there is magic and light! When I dance, the
euphoria of the moment erases the memory of all the painful physical conditioning and self-denial. To
dance, for me, is to live!

Rank:
Now, use the following chart to rate the compositions for their sentence fluency.
Score each sample, based on the following range: 1 = poor; 2 = satisfactory; 3 = strong.

A variety of end marks (. ? !) represents a variety of tones and levels of excitement in a piece.
Punctuation can really enhance fluency.
** These might include rhyming words, alliteration (the repetition of consonant sounds at the beginnings
of words), and assonance (the repetition of vowel sounds). All can add to a sense of rhythm. You'll learn
more about such devices in semester 2.

In a good paragraph, where you show in your own writing what you know about sentence fluency, tell
which sample you ranked the highest and explain what qualities you saw in it. Attach your charts.

UTILIZE A TABELA ABAIXO PARA COLOCAR A SUA CLASSIFICAÇÃO DE 1 A 3. SE PRECISAR, CONSULTE O


LINK DO PADLET COM O TRABALHO FEITO EM GRUPO. ESCREVA UM TEXTO ABAIXO DA TABELA
EXPLICANDO PORQUE VOCÊ CLASSIFICOU OS TEXTOS DESTA FORMA CONFORME A INSTRUÇÃO
ACIMA

SAMPLE 1 SAMPLE 2 SAMPLE 3


Rhythm 2 1 3
Cadence 2 2 3
Pleasing sound 2 2 3
Variety of sentence styles 3 1 3
Transitions 3 1 2
Variety of punctuation * 1 2 3
Interesting diction 2 1 3
Notable word sounds ** 3 2 3
Score each sample, based on the following range: 1 = poor; 2 = satisfactory; 3 = strong.

Why:

Sample 1:

Rhythm: The sentences flow smoothly and contribute to a coherent story. There's a good mix of longer
and shorter sentences.

Cadence: The rhythm remains consistent throughout, maintaining a steady pace.

Pleasing sound: The language is lively and engaging, making for an enjoyable read.

Variety of sentence styles: There's a nice variety of sentence structures that enrich the reading
experience.

Transitions: While transitions between ideas are generally smooth, some areas could be polished a bit
more.

Variety of punctuation: It uses a range of punctuation effectively to enhance meaning and tone.

Interesting diction: It employs expressive language that adds depth to the narrative.

Sample 2:

Rhythm: The rhythm is somewhat consistent but could benefit from more varied sentence structures.

Cadence: The flow is generally smooth but doesn't match the quality of Sample 1 or 3.

Pleasing sound: The language is clear but lacks emotional depth and engagement.
Variety of sentence styles: Sentence structures are more repetitive compared to Samples 1 and 3.

Transitions: Transitions between ideas are adequate but could be smoother.

Variety of punctuation: There's limited variety in punctuation use, which affects fluency and tone.

Interesting diction: The language is straightforward and lacks vivid imagery compared to the other
samples.

Sample 3:

Rhythm: The rhythm is strong and contributes to a sense of flow and movement, reflecting the passion
described.

Cadence: The prose has a dynamic cadence that mirrors the emotional intensity of the subject.

Pleasing sound: The language is vivid and evocative, creating a powerful sensory experience.

Variety of sentence styles: It uses a wide range of sentence structures effectively.

Transitions: Smooth transitions enhance the coherence and flow of the piece.

Variety of punctuation: Effective use of punctuation enhances the timing and impact of the text.

Interesting diction: Rich language enhances the descriptive power of the narrative.

This breakdown shows how each sample handles sentence fluency differently, with Sample 1 and 3
excelling due to their strong rhythms, varied sentence structures, effective use of punctuation, and
expressive language.
Student: Rafael Cordeiro Faria
ID: 679645

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