In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard
enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Youngsters in many countries are taught to believe that any goals can be eventually attained by
putting in an adequate effort on. This essay discusses both the merits and demerits of delivering
this message to young people.
Some suppose that it would be immensely beneficial if children trust in the power of hard work. In
this way, they would have the tendency to strive for excellence and form great behavioral
patterns and attitudes towards their education. As a result, these young learners are likely to
attain outstanding academic performances which inevitably will benefit their future careers.
Furthermore, this could also boost an individuals’ confidence. Only by utterly trusting in their
abilities, youngsters are able to persevere and overcome all obstacles, turning out to be
successful adults in the long run.
Despite the aforementioned benefits, the phenomenon is not without its downsides. The main
problem is that many children can not have study-life balance as they tend to study excessively.
As a result, they have lLess or even no time left for sporting or recreational activities which would
be detrimental to not only their physical growth but also their mental well-being. Another
disadvantage can be seen in fixed mindsets as not all goals can be accomplished just by working
diligently. If youngsters try hard to become well-known singers although they are not blessed with
related natural talents, they would be very unlikely to succeed, thereby wasting their valuable
time.
In conclusion, being told that anything can be achieved by adequate endeavors would incentivize
young people to own foster good habits to perform effectively at school as well as stimulate
improve their self-assurance. Nevertheless, many might also struggle to balance their studies
and lives while others may waste their time because of wrong beliefs.
Estimated
Grade
Task 8-9 250 -320 words
Response
all parts of the topic are responded to well
all parts of the question are responded to well
main ideas are clear
explanation/examples of main ideas are clear
Cohesion 9 good overall structure
and
Coherence the first paragraph clearly introduces the essay
topic sentences introduce paragraphs well / clear central topic
paragraph development is logical
Vocabulary 8 ✘
appropriate word choices and control of word endings/forms
repetition is avoided
spelling is correct
Grammar ✘
articles (a, an, the)
8
✘
sentence structures are correct
Punctuation
Overall 8 to 8.5 Good work.
